A diary of thoughts and a behind the scenes look into stories I cover.
Tuesday, July 26, 2005
I will have another story that airs at 10 tonight. I think you will be able to find it on WKRN.com by tomorrow. Let me know what you think.
3 comments:
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Just found your blog site. This is very interesting. I really want to know more about the VJ system. I only have my TV on News 2 so I will be able to see the product as it is growing, so to speak.
Saw your story on working in the freezer. Good pics. Great editing.
Your voice delivery was much better. A little more emotion. A little closer to sounding like you were having fun telling the story. But you're not there yet.
Yes, the delivery was better but you still sound like you're reading when you speak. You're writting is conversational in the conventional way. I'm not sure it's your way of converstation and because of that you still sound like you're reading to the viewer instead of telling them an interesting story that you think is interesting too.
Push the emotion even more. Don't freak out if you think your voice sounds phoney or fake. We all feel that way the first few times we hear ourselves reading a script for track.
For example. In your story about the freezer workers. You had a line about "welcome to..." but you didn't sound like you were welcoming the viewer at all. You sounded like you were reading. Is that how you would welcome someone to your house? Maybe a salesman you wanted to blow off but not a friend or someone you really wanted to have come in and visit anywhere.
Before I forget...you were much more creative in your word choices in this script. Still conversational in the word selection but imaginative as well. That's what will help set your writing apart. Keep that up. Read more. I'm not saying you need to sound like a romance novelest in your script with overly flowery, discriptive words! You were hitting a good mark with your writing this time. Keep it up.
Push your voice delivery even more. You can do it and, believe me, you won't be making a fool of yourself. People can't see your face or your expressions. You have to make up for that with your voice delivery. It's a phone call and you're trying to tell your wife you love her. Don't you use your voice with more infletion then? Do the same with the script. Push it.
You're getting better at being the total package. The camerawork is there. So is the editing. The voice delivery needs to catch up.
You are headed in the right direction and, no real offence meant to some of the other stories I saw...but you can tell those folks have little or no idea how to use the camera besides getting something in frame and rolling tape. They aren't thinking about light or true sequencing. One or two predictable cutaways of hands, set the camera on the floor, and that's it. You're camerawork, especially compared to that first protest story justifies the experience you have. Be consistent. Good job.
John, thanks for taking the time to help me out. I really appreciate it a bunch. I have a lot to absorb and I am hopeful that it will all start clicking soon.
3 comments:
Just found your blog site. This is very interesting. I really want to know more about the VJ system. I only have my TV on News 2 so I will be able to see the product as it is growing, so to speak.
Good luck and hang in there for us.
Sick of hearing from me yet?
Saw your story on working in the freezer. Good pics. Great editing.
Your voice delivery was much better. A little more emotion. A little closer to sounding like you were having fun telling the story. But you're not there yet.
Yes, the delivery was better but you still sound like you're reading when you speak. You're writting is conversational in the conventional way. I'm not sure it's your way of converstation and because of that you still sound like you're reading to the viewer instead of telling them an interesting story that you think is interesting too.
Push the emotion even more. Don't freak out if you think your voice sounds phoney or fake. We all feel that way the first few times we hear ourselves reading a script for track.
For example. In your story about the freezer workers. You had a line about "welcome to..." but you didn't sound like you were welcoming the viewer at all. You sounded like you were reading. Is that how you would welcome someone to your house? Maybe a salesman you wanted to blow off but not a friend or someone you really wanted to have come in and visit anywhere.
Before I forget...you were much more creative in your word choices in this script. Still conversational in the word selection but imaginative as well. That's what will help set your writing apart. Keep that up. Read more. I'm not saying you need to sound like a romance novelest in your script with overly flowery, discriptive words! You were hitting a good mark with your writing this time. Keep it up.
Push your voice delivery even more. You can do it and, believe me, you won't be making a fool of yourself. People can't see your face or your expressions. You have to make up for that with your voice delivery. It's a phone call and you're trying to tell your wife you love her. Don't you use your voice with more infletion then? Do the same with the script. Push it.
You're getting better at being the total package. The camerawork is there. So is the editing. The voice delivery needs to catch up.
You are headed in the right direction and, no real offence meant to some of the other stories I saw...but you can tell those folks have little or no idea how to use the camera besides getting something in frame and rolling tape. They aren't thinking about light or true sequencing. One or two predictable cutaways of hands, set the camera on the floor, and that's it. You're camerawork, especially compared to that first protest story justifies the experience you have. Be consistent. Good job.
John, thanks for taking the time to help me out. I really appreciate it a bunch. I have a lot to absorb and I am hopeful that it will all start clicking soon.
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